Feedback to Learner
You’ve got provided some good information about your reading/writing life. Your English is excellent, however you possess some errors that are minor. Your essay gains focus and power since it continues on. The start is a bit disorganized, but by the end you have the wind in your sails.
To revise this essay for the profile during the final end of this semester you will need to think of developing your paragraphs. Then you’ll definitely like to correct any errors that are grammar. Good work.
When it comes to modification, I made a decision to consider the Professor Hays commentary. We included appropriate information and took away unneeded terms. We seemed through every single comments that are yellow answer each feedback. We corrected fragments and run-ons.
The Journey of my writing life
We actually don’t keep in mind the thing I first published or the book that is first read but exactly what I do keep in mind is We hated reading while growing up. 继续阅读My Journey Being A journalist